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| I loved this piece, great work. So much is said in a few short verses. This one caught my eye because I remember reading some of your work under my old pen-name a year or so ago. Glad to see some familiar authors are still here, keep up the good work. |
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Comment by: - 2008-07-09 10:53
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i like this
good work |
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Comment by: soul - 2008-06-28 17:07
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| i like this. the coins remind me of boondock saints. |
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Comment by: kamereon Online- 2007-10-25 12:55
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| I agreed with you originally Bucho, I didn't like the 1st and 3rd lines of the second stanza because of the repetition of "soul"...i changed the last word to mind to keep along the same train of thought and avoid repetition...i also completely rewrote the first line of the last stanza...i liked the original line, but didn't feel that it tied lines 7 & 9 together...thanks for the input |
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| very funny and thrilling i think it is a good written piece in few words the mysterical atmosphere make one ponder about the meaning of life and it costs.it is really a beautiful piece that i likes good continuation for writing!!! |
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