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subtropic
The James
United States, Babylon, Miami

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Under No Circumstances

Don't you do it, Jimmy. Don't you dare do it.

Even if he promises you a job and your own private whore and a new Hummer.

Even if he starts screaming and running in circles and pissing on the linoleum.

Even if he cries and falls to his knees and begs like a condemned child molester.

Even if he pulls out the flag and the Bible. Even if righteous oaths and pretty praise ooze from his mouth like warm butter and syrup off the side of a hot pancake.

Don't you do it, Jimmy. Don't vote for that Republican.

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VaughnShepherd Comment by: VaughnShepherd - 2007-10-25 14:13
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Love it, love it, love it. No critique here. This piece has the best voice I've read in quite some time. Bravo!
karjon Comment by: karjon Online- 2007-10-25 11:30
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Magic. Loved it. Nothing more to say.

Cheers

Karen
Audiogeist Comment by: Audiogeist - 2007-10-25 06:42
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Lol...with Ash's comment. I enjoyed this read - the repetition makes him sound not just like he's ranting, but like he's a fanatic!
icy Comment by: icy - 2007-10-25 05:02
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Ooh I like that. My favourite line is "Even if righteous oaths and pretty praise ooze from his mouth like warm butter and syrup off the side of a hot pancake". So visual!
Ash19640 Comment by: Ash19640 - 2007-10-25 03:28
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Even if he promises you a job and your own private whore and a new Hummer (LOL)
Sounds like excellent advice Jim. Great write too-- this theme was not expected at all and I appreciated the seriousness of it underneath the laughs. Cheers Ash :D
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