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Icy Sedgwick
United Kingdom, London

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Under No Circumstances (Story challenge #16)

"The castle is largely as you see it. You may wander where you choose, but under no circumstances must you enter the east wing".

I nodded my agreement while knowing that I’d disregard the Count’s words. A gracious host, I knew he would allow me a degree of freedom, and I seized it.

My second night in the castle saw me creep down abandoned hallways to the east wing. The heavy bolts across the door squealed in protest as I pulled them back, and I winced, slipping through the gap to avoid detection.

Something stirred in the dark.

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Nora Comment by: Nora Online- 2007-10-26 15:21
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Another QEI reference? Cool story.
Ash19640 Comment by: Ash19640 - 2007-10-26 00:24
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Excellent. I really like the way you lead us into this story Icy, leaving us, inevitably, with a cliffhanger. Was he a Word Count?
subtropic Comment by: subtropic Online- 2007-10-25 16:56
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Good creepy stuff.

Obligatory punctuation comment: first para, period s/b inside quotes.
VaughnShepherd Comment by: VaughnShepherd - 2007-10-25 14:12
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Oooh a cliffhanger! I immediately thought of Beauty and the Beast, hehe. Well written piece, I like it a lot.
bobbygroove Comment by: bobbygroove - 2007-10-25 11:48
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stirring in the dark...never a good sign! nice little piece of suspense.
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