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DaveyBoyGreen
David Cromby
United Kingdom, Harold Newman's World, Liverpool

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Terminally Unhidden Lust

Each conical day
she stood at the tip
at the hype of the lust
pouring graffiti on my heart.

Drumbeats thrum in my fever-bowl brain
like a millionaire's fingers
spending my breaths, scarlet and blue
velvet on bone
yearning so
pressed with aches.


I scrubbed
in white foam
the skin off the bone
of her fragile veneer

she dipped
my lacerations
in the sneering salt
of the Autumn sea

we folded up
the other's muffled
yes yes yells
in desire-riddled quilts

thin breaths
we shared
of lust
in the secrecy of sand dunes
pouring
sex sweat
on our diminishing hopes.

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lucy Comment by: lucy - 2007-11-04 14:46
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I scrubbed
in white foam
the skin off the bone
of her fragile veneer

That is terrific.
Joni Ramos Comment by: Joni Ramos - 2007-10-27 18:11
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she dipped
my lacerations
in the sneering salt
of the Autumn sea

awesome lines....Ouch!
interesting lines..word choices here were a mix of seared emotions lacerating on terminal lust?
vickihowery Comment by: vickihowery - 2007-10-26 10:04
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I absolutely love this piece. Your choice of words - brilliant . I would love to hear this read. You have painted every word perfectly - I am reading again . Well done !!
TequilaTwilight Comment by: TequilaTwilight - 2007-10-26 05:54
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"pouring graffiti on my heart."

To start off -i absolutely love that line, so original and brilliantly chosen!
"fever-bowl brain" is a great phrase too.

you know what, if i keep quoting bits i like i'm just gonna have to put the entire poem in brackets! :o)

brilliantly chosen language tht worked through the entire poem. By far my fave of yours do far!

xxx
ladylovelace Comment by: ladylovelace - 2007-10-25 21:23
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I really enjoyed your wording. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
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