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Makotokugi
Matthew Oelke
United States, ca, corona

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A seat of fallen...

Fallen, the water of the shallows…enough that the your sword covers...

The form is what I see… it is so beautifully graceful…sands crushed become infinite, never completely undone… never irrecoverable from the mind…


M~


© Copyright 2007 published

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Silver Blood Comment by: Silver Blood - 2007-10-28 14:28
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i dont normally see people use so few words and yet make such a bold statement. its i style i'll have to try.
EnigmaticSoul Comment by: EnigmaticSoul - 2007-10-28 06:58
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You create a vivid picture with a minimal use of words. Very good.
EnigmaticSoul Comment by: EnigmaticSoul - 2007-10-28 06:58
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You create a vivid picture with a minimal use of words. Very good.
lucy Comment by: lucy - 2007-10-28 06:35
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Exactly.

Nothing ever disappears completely.
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