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musings of life
whimper for the life
and cry for the seems
split by the knife
and hung from the beams
ill try and ill try
and ill reap what ive sown
but goodbye goodbye
they remain unknown
for climbing the trees
are creatues of fever
they are soot on the breeze
the chaos weavers
but yet not in the trees
here on the ground
for the fruit my soul keeps
so they must have come down
or maybe in mind
where such demons breed
and thoughts unwind
making me plead
and the life i have failed
by planting their seed
with hands that have palied
and nails that still bleed
ive needed so long
and whispered so harshly
i fear it now gone
maybe it hears me if only but hardly
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| the meaning of my poems i dont truly know myself until their completed i have no idea where the abstract words are leading me. as for the meaning of this one your analasiys would have to be correct in a way. really the seams where meant to be my steady ground and set ideals which where broken long ago. |
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Comment by: jesscat - 2008-02-18 12:01
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wonderful rhythm! it was beautiful. I didn't understand it fully, but I don't have to, do I? The first bit is awesome!
"whimper for the life
and cry for the seems
split by the knife
and hung from the beams"
seems, like seams, but also could-have-beens, which when broken, make things fall apart. It is so mysterious, because it could be interpreted in so many ways, whether literally or metaphorically. I think its brilliant! |
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Comment by: DavidHe Online- 2007-12-07 05:04
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| Good read! Brilliant! I love it! Best wishes. |
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| Deliciously Dark! |
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| Very nice piece and great flow. Very good read. |
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