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DVJLabonte
Darrell Labonte
Canada, Ontario, St. Catharines

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To You I Would

The miles that spread between us, taunt us, torture us,
I am jealous of the eagles wings, its flight, its power,
To you I would travel on foot, without water, without food,
It’s only you in my dreams, in my heart, in my soul.

If I could only find a way to be with you, here with you, there with you,
So we could be content with each other, hold each other, love each other,
The leagues of land would disappear in our hearts, in our minds, in our souls,
I will forever be here even when you’re not, when you are there, and I am here.

Our love like a tight rope line traveling the lands, the plains, the mountains,
It is strong as a the stone of the mountain, as the water that runs, as the fire that burns,
Together we shall be in the our minds, in time, and then forever,
A bond cannot be broken once it is spoken, once it is known, once it is true.

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esthermorey Comment by: esthermorey - 2007-11-01 06:04
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I really like this. The words are real and very relatable. Good writes.
lucy Comment by: lucy - 2007-11-01 04:34
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eagle's (it tripped me up with the reading, thinking it was more than one eagle :))

as a the stone ?

be in the our minds ?

The overall poem is so loving. The set of the lines with the long line and the short ones with commas would be nice to hear out loud, with stops in between- the imagery it sounds beautiful where both of you are- fav. line is the tightrope line. NICE.
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