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yugohoshi
yugo hoshi
Japan, Tokyo

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EXTRACT: help needed, any explosives experts?

**An extract from 'the Seeds of all Evil.' I dont know anything about bombs, so if there are any chemistry whiz's, plz help...

The Judiciary system was our enemy now. And it had a face: it wore a wig and he had himself displayed all over the newspapers. Judge Christopher Dale. He was the first target. Luckily for us, Jesse was a straight-A chemistry student. He knew all the tricks, and had the trust of his teachers – access to a lot of the school’s products. He gave us a formula:
2H2 + O2 = 2H2O + (NRG)
And NRG is = BOOM. He said he could make it. This was simple home made explosive, powerful enough though. We found all the ingredients easy – they were at the science department, the chemists, and the university labs – and now all we had to do was find out where the Dale guy lived, and we have justice. Our justice.

The bomb was set, we hid and watched. Every second felt like a month’s worth of patience weighing down on us.
12 seconds…
30 seconds
5 minutes
5 minutes and 12 seconds…
‘Are you sure you rigged it?’ Steve asked. Jesse hesitated for a second, then whispered, ‘yes.’
‘Go back and check!’
‘No! What if it goes off then?’ Jesse protested.
‘Nobody’s going back!’ Eric reassured.
The air was dense. Tension rose in the car with every passing second, filling our breathing space like pollution. I checked my wrist watch: 5 minutes and 30 seconds. Then the ground shook. There was a deep boom; our ears popped and our ribs felt the vibrations. A white flash came from the street where the house was, like a photo was being taken. A ball of smoke appeared from below the trees, as if it was rolling upwards towards the sky, and in another second it disappeared.
All of us released a sigh together. Eric restarted the car, I put on my seatbelt and we drove. We went passed that street and he slowed down. The ripping sounds of car alarms grew as we approached, and they echoed up and down the street.

The fuse the uni guys had made was dodgy and it missed the mark completely. The charge of the explosives had been underestimated. Being an amateur weapon, controlling the blast was near impossible. We later gathered what exactly happened:
1. The fuse triggered but the explosives didn’t,
2. But the pressure in the capsule gave enough disturbances for the NRG to react.
3. The explosion lifted Dale’s six-cylinder Holden onto two wheels, and stripped the leaves off a tree on the neighbour’s front yard.
4. Fences either side got reduced to splinters, the grass blown to ash, the front windows of the house completely shattered and the door was torn off its hinges.
5. We then later found out, Dale and his wife were wounded, and a couple across the street were thrown off their beds and covered in shards of glass.
It was all over the media. It went onto Yahoo News; hit the front page of every major newspaper in Australia; and became the top story for over a week. Anarchism was now serious business. It almost deafened Judge Dale and his wife, but our message was heard.

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BrookeOlive Comment by: BrookeOlive - 2007-11-03 05:05
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"Anarchism was now serious business. It almost deafened Judge Dale and his wife, but our message was heard."
Killer end to that paragraph Yugo, loved it!
rosiewolf Comment by: rosiewolf - 2007-11-01 14:47
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I know bugger-all about chemistry or bombs...but maybe you don't have to know more that is strictly necessary to give the feeling of verisimilitude to your piece? I really loved your use of sense imagery...ears popping, ribs shaking, stale air in the vehicle. That stuff really works.
yugohoshi Comment by: yugohoshi - 2007-10-31 20:49
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As I said, if there are inaccuracies to do with the chemistry, or description in the blast, (my research is terrible) please tell me.
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