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Charmain
charmain porter
Ireland

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The end game

I

With little weight I slipped through incomplete;
a mindful of games, niggling together bunched in a row.

You fired; tears had fallen, seeped into
soiled memories grasping your name, this end game.

Holding close to the loose happenings of our
adventure, our souls locked from far away, away.

Now out alone in the cold, I am out of my mind,
the chipping on the wall comes thundering down,

within the half-inched expectancy, life goes on.

II

I have seen the war,
came through alive with survival far from my mind.
No longer can I disbelieve the one sided story,
blinded by yours, believed mine, followed by the truth.

Houses crumbled to the ground,
traces of smoke gathered high into the sky,
searching flight. Escaping:
children watched to draw on differing views.

III

And so, you left me standing facing myself,
failing through a city of congested dreams.
The blue slated jump, pushed the edge of reason.

You opened up old wounds, on tearing the surface
I let out news, playing to the old tune
of poetry, here on a page for you to see.
As you left quickly like a sunken ship,
my foolish pride crumbled, and to feel you again,
I pushed the door closed, forever.

IV

You gave me an opening of hope,
surrounded me with love.

Blanketed by the fear of loss
I drove the bulldozers into obscurity,

losing all sightings, side-stepping,
left now with the longing.

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Gerard Comment by: Gerard - 2008-09-22 11:26
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IV

You gave me an opening of hope,
surrounded me with love.

Blanketed by the fear of loss
I drove the bulldozers into obscurity,

losing all sightings, side-stepping,
left now with the longing.

such a beautiful ending for this.
Gerard Comment by: Gerard - 2008-09-22 11:25
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Hey Charmain, it's been great reading this. I haven't read your stuff or heard you read in ages. You'll really have to get yourself down to Make Yourself Heard when it's next on. I'll be late to it because I'm working but you should read this at it. I think it would suit performance. Hope you're well say hi to Majella, Hendrix and the cat for me.
RedWitch Comment by: RedWitch - 2007-11-18 14:08
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I really liked this, it was full of emotion and painted a vivid picture in my mind. p.s. hope your ok been a long time since we spoke!
Wendy x
BathshebaEverdin Comment by: BathshebaEverdin - 2007-09-03 10:36
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beautiful poem, nicely constructed in sections, and a powerful homage to a sense of internal and external war and the synergies of what it means to be a survivor. This will evoke powerful emotions in readers universally.
BathshebaEverdin Comment by: BathshebaEverdin - 2007-09-03 10:36
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beautiful poem, nicely constructed in sections, and a powerful homage to a sense of internal and external war and the synergies of what it means to be a survivor. This will evoke powerful emotions in readers universally.
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