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antunes
Ana C. Antunes
Brazil, Santos (My treasured Island)

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"CAPTURING MY DREAMS"

Convinced that it was maybe just a fall
All of a sudden I woke up feeling so true.
Perhaps it was not a dream after all
Torturing my soul I tried to write to you.
Under the letter I wrote my initial
Really sure you would get what I wrote,
Insisted again that it was official.
Nevertheless, you didn't see my note,
Gaggling, giggling, jiggling your foot.

My own soul burns and I feel so blue
You left me wandering without a clue.

Destiny will bring us together though
Right into my arms I believe it'll be
Energy coming from me to you slow.
As my life depends on what you see
My heart knows we were meant to each other.
So why give up if hope's what ties us rather??

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alzariah Comment by: alzariah - 2007-11-28 05:01
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i love it specially it is simple and says a lot of things...
it is like if you have described the mystical feeling of falling in love...
thanks for sharing this...
antunes Comment by: antunes - 2007-11-06 13:05
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Now I am really crying... of joy!! Thank you so much for this truth: to save one's soul one must write as it should. Love, Ana
RSK Comment by: RSK - 2007-11-06 10:18
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To save, the soul. One must write.
Your soul has been saved. I like, it. It sounds just like it should.
Good.
antunes Comment by: antunes - 2007-11-06 09:12
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As I am broken into tears,
Leaving me speechless, in fear,
I might not write any more as it seems,
Entranced, though, I am still capturing my dreams...
Not even out of this world you'll take it from me!! (giggles)
alien Comment by: alien - 2007-11-06 08:32
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I think that this is a poem about an event verypersonal to you and as such, some of the details don't make sense to me very much. I felt that in some places, more appropriate language could also be used to get the sense of what your meaning is across to the reader.
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