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Simile13t
S. (Johnny) Thonn
United States, South Carolina

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The Streets Of Kingston

The Streets Of Kingston

Leaves descending to the asphalt, cold and chill
from the breeze, the foliage is changing
its colors and the calling of winter beckons
in the distance. Like Fall in Kingston,
burning in the cold chills,
Niagara slowly hardens itself in the freeze.
Old Victorian houses scream of past
lives lived. Toronto lingers
in thoughts, in nostalgia, memories
forgotten some time ago—memories savoring
those moments lost, those moments yearned.
And the cold chills continue to make its
presence known, causing goose bumps
to rise and skin chap and crack in their dryness.
Leaves ripen in new colors as if their
lives are beginning, descend
to their death, to the unpredictability
of change. A blizzard falls
in my thoughts, craving for that
nostalgia. A blizzard blowing
winter’s memories of some years
ago, some ages when my feet
roam the streets of Kingston.

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Valerie Comment by: Valerie - 2007-11-11 00:19
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Very nice cadence here, and an enjoyable read.

Critique - what I would like to see here are at least three verses in order to give the reader some pause.

Line 13 "goose bumps" consider 'goose flesh'
Line 14 - I read "chap" as 'chafe' and when I reread I caught my reading error.
With goose flesh and chafe, you would have the alliteration of the 'f' sounds.
Just a thought..
Joni Ramos Comment by: Joni Ramos - 2007-11-06 23:02
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Another brilliant write...I can feel your words very clearly...I'm freezing in the South China Sea, hehe...Winter's memories, nostalgia of moments traveling through time.
I can almost see the crisp foilage of leaves and feel the blizzard, my feet almost feels cold..I'm starting to get chills.
I'd have to grab my winter coat (only to find out I'm in the South China Sea, hehe)

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