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DaveyBoyGreen
David Cromby
United Kingdom, Harold Newman's World, Liverpool

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The Freckles On My Heart

those beautiful spots
the freckles on my heart
you picked them off
with a sliver
stripped
a cocktail stick
of ancient cedar.

you dipped them
in fog
before feeding them
tiny cones of mist
baby cornet scars
back to me
with a dollop of strawberry sauce
wrung from a vein
I left open.

and there were holes
a million counted
where your toothpicks and cocktail sticks
some snapped
were greying in my heart.

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Joni Ramos Comment by: Joni Ramos - 2007-12-05 17:25
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This is an awesome piece of work. Bravo!
vickihowery Comment by: vickihowery - 2007-11-05 07:49
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Incredible imagery . Beautiful description of something that sounds quite painful underneath it all.
AMorgan Comment by: AMorgan - 2007-11-04 18:45
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beautiful :) i love the way the lines are broken up.
witzwirler Comment by: witzwirler - 2007-11-04 16:41
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shouldn't leave your veins open, blood gets everywhere.
lucy Comment by: lucy - 2007-11-04 14:42
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wow. The pain in this poem. Wonderfully visual. Oh, but so romantic. A love deep and a harsh breakoff.

fav. lines: those beautiful spots
the freckles on my heart

but I love the strawberry sauce line also.

thanks for the sharing of your writing
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