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octopiesoup
tabby anne
United States, sc, hartsville

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Icarus

Bite down,
hard, white calcium against soft, white flesh,
and rip me open seam by seam.
I can feel you tugging on the thread of bone tissue,
unraveling my chest one rib at a time,
until everything is exposed.

You noted the suction of a missing object,
a blank space ready for something to be placed.
My name is Icarus, I am made of wax and your hope.

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Dakota Comment by: Dakota - 2008-02-08 09:33
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This is so good. I'm envious too. Visceral this is for sure. The disturbing edge, great trade marks coming to light - a really visual feast - that I'm treated to everytime I sit down to read your work.
Stephie Comment by: Stephie - 2007-11-13 11:36
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I am envious of this poem...fantastic. There is nothing that I see that would need any sort of change. You seem to always leave me wanting to read more of your poems. Bravo darling :)
octopiesoup Comment by: octopiesoup - 2007-11-13 08:40
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Thank you kindly sir! :]
Bucho Comment by: Bucho - 2007-11-13 08:38
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i like how this starts off with an almost sexual overtone but then moves to a more visceral and internal feel. the use of Icarus and wax was nice too (implying the nearness of heat and falling)...loved it!
octopiesoup Comment by: octopiesoup - 2007-11-04 20:58
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Thank you so much!
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