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Limits of Love: Wee Challenge #17
Autumn was Fred’s favourite time of year. Especially on days like this: beautiful sunshine, cold and crisp morning air that sent breath rolling out in excited puffs.
And there she was, gamine in her carefree gait. She always had a kind word for him, a soft touch. It was as if the autumn leaves fell for her. They wafted around her, dancing and turning, whispering her beauty as they settled to the ground.
How to let her know how he really felt? He darted up to her playfully, determined to trust his instincts. He tried to mount Elizabeth’s leg…
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Comment by: karjon - 2007-11-08 13:59
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Damn. You know, I just went into the challenge thread and tried to clear up where my dislike for anthropomorphism lies - erm, it's this. It's when it's the twist.
Ah, Sharon - honest, I wrote what I did in the challenge thread before I read your story - I wasn't trying to offend, or to pick on you.
But, but, but...
This is just me - you can see from the other reviews that people like this kind of twist. It's just my allergy, so you should always write whatyou and others like.
As always, it is well-written - just not my kind of thing.
Cheers
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Comment by: Juanita - 2007-11-07 08:05
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| lol, I loved the end! That was really good. |
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How funny! As I dressed like a dog on Halloween and humped several legs, I identified with the MC. And I love "gamine in her carefree gait." Nice use of an interesting word. Touching on anthropomorphism... you're a naughty girl.
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Comment by: Nora Online- 2007-11-06 15:32
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| Aaaah! That is too funny. And you're such a rebel with your anthropomorphism. Perfect images and emotion. I loved it. |
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| Yoiks! Penguin - you're right! Oops! |
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