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Rebeccaji
Rebecca Bista
United Kingdom, London

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The Laws of Physics

The first time I saw Elise I understood immediately that this girl did not have the air of solidity that other humans have. The clear depths of her eyes were full of moonbeams like little glacial pools high on the mountainside; her feet did not walk so much as flow, and even her clothes were made of fine tissue-like fabrics that floated lightly around her. You could almost look right through her. For me, it was love at first sight.

As you know, it is not often that those such as ourselves, the pure elements, fall in love with one of the base creatures, the beasts and the human beings. They are so fixed, without the capacity to transmute, to circulate, to be in flux. How to merge oneself with them? Yes, I know it is said that all creatures, the elements, even the Earth itself, are made of crumbled star-fragments. That we are all created and given life by universal alchemy. That we are, ultimately, all the same. But they are so finite, these humans, so much destined for death, whereas I, water, am eternal, even if I am consumed, burnt, buried or imprisoned in a glass.

Elise, I believed, was different. She spoke with the voice of a small brook that tumbles down the rocks among perfumed flowers, and all my memories of childhood, the profound essences of my being, my primordiality, were awakened, stirred up, unleashed when I heard her. I wanted to leave my glass and become a fountain, a geyser, the Nile, Niagara for her. I wanted to become a swimming pool in which she could take her pleasure. I wanted to be an ocean to carry her to the ends of the world or the monsoon rains to make life always luxuriant around her.

At last, she sat down in front of me. I tried to keep my cool. I believed that when she drank me, she would feel all my power, my elemental force circulating in her body, my rivers in her veins, my waterfalls in her eyes, my oceans in her heart, and she would love me. She would drink me, I would enter her body and we would become one. She lifted the glass. I touched her lips with a passionate kiss, I flowed down her throat. I had finally reached my goal, my apotheosis.

Too late, I realised my mistake. After a little while, she got up and walked towards the bathroom. And there, she left me, and I found myself once more mingled with the waters of the earth, on their journey to the sea.

It is thus that beasts, humans concern themselves with us: without regard, without taking any account of our essentiality. They think everything is here for their use. They fill us with bitterness.

I will never fall in love again.

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krademacher Comment by: krademacher - 2008-01-13 20:20
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The imagery and flow of this felt magical. Nothing came across as forced and I really liked the play on love, permanence and capricious disregard.

This was a true gem worthy of many re-reads.
Rebeccaji Comment by: Rebeccaji - 2007-11-20 02:35
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Thanks Karen and Juanita. It has another dimension - one that isn't immediately obvious - that works on an intercultural level, though I am glad it works without that. About certain communities who may not be romantically involved with each other and what happens if you fall in love with someone from the wrong community.
Thanks for your great and positive comments!
karjon Comment by: karjon Online- 2007-11-19 15:54
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I found this quite fascinating, Rebecca - a story to be read on many levels. An allegory of love, yes, but also of waste/consumerism.

I especially liked that the water was a small amount of liquid - a glass full, rather than an ocean - it seemed to fit the story so well.

There was a certain glib irony in this lover being pissed out without a thought - again, waste is there, but so is unrequited love.

A big story, with some beautiful descriptions, and highly original. I have a feeling I'll be reading this one again.

Cheers

Karen
Juanita Comment by: Juanita - 2007-11-06 08:41
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Wow. That was great! The imagery was really good. I loved it.

"She spoke with the voice of a small brook that tumbles down the rocks among perfumed flowers," That was beautiful.

And the ending, very meaningful: "It is thus that beasts, humans concern themselves with us: without regard, without taking any account of our essentiality. They think everything is here for their use."

Best thing I've read all day.
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