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Frontalot
Sean Hanson
United States, WA, Fort Lewis

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VI-VII

Scattershot mortars:
they still land in my sleep

and the parts are always there:
the rended arm, the head like a cannonball,
lopped in half like a canteloupe,
a hot vinyl bodybag, the sack of old groceries
left to rot in the sun.

The cannibals are fiending again,
shirtless men with machetes;
we think they're at the gates,
but they're already in: they're in the well
and they're clamoring up,
fingertips rusted with blood,
wet with mosswater, moths breaking nails,
breaking wings in the climb toward the light.

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AMorgan Comment by: AMorgan - 2007-11-07 01:01
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Stunning last line. I'm a total sucker for those...but who isn't? I don't dig the repetition of "they..." at the beginning, although I have a tendency to do it myself. I'm also wary of the words "nightmares" and "dreams" in poetry, although I understand the meaning in this- maybe change it to something like "They land in my sleep/shatter my nightmares/my dreams"...not a good example, but I know you get the drift (and can think of something even more spectacular!).

Also, the second and third lines of the second stanza are haunting. Works beautifully.
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