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Frontalot
Sean Hanson
United States, WA, Fort Lewis

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Trips in Autumn

Stealing High Street signs
is funny until you're lost on High Street, high,
and then you get the irony,

but I could stay lost here,
especially in autumn.

Watch the leaves like spiders skitter from my sneakers,
Eugene in Kodachrome while flashbulbs blow and burn the trees,
the greens, the reds, all mixed up, wrong and overexposed,
traffic like a river, like blood, come, anything that flows,
the virility and life of a city flushing through one-way streets.

Watch myself running along, a giddy kid in a grainy film
dressed for winter and alive in the colors.

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AMorgan Comment by: AMorgan - 2007-11-07 00:53
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I like this one less than the other, but I think it has a lot of potential. The opening stanza makes me giggle, also because I can see that sign from my street corner :)

The third stanza has some incredible imagery that I think is extremely fitting. I especially love the line "Eugene in Kodachrome while flashbulbs blow and burn the trees/the greens, the reds, all mixed up, wrong and overexposed"-- lovely!

The only part I'm unsure of is the last stanza. I like the grainy film, but I'd almost just leave out the last line. Although you don't state it in this way, it seems cliche, therefore, icky. I think it's mostly the "in love with the future" line-- maybe think of another way to say it? Or just don't take my advice at all...yeah....

Know what I'm saying, dawg?
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