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Frontalot
Sean Hanson
United States, WA, Fort Lewis

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Gender Studies

I put her bra on first,
the firm foam hollow past my chest,
cold air still breathing past my nipples.

The thong came next,
its frill still agitating the tender skin,
the g-string like a dental-floss bandsaw.

Then a wig, tight jeans,
a halter top, some tweezing,
eyeliner, lipstick, foundation,
blush,
a thin glittery necklace,
a thin glittery bracelet,
a phantom woman in women's clothes,
the Trojan horse for an entire gender.

I no longer knew who I was.

I doubt she did either.

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Bucho Comment by: Bucho - 2007-11-13 08:31
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this one had me at the very first line. great way to capture the reader's attention. my only critique would be to get rid of the last two lines. you've already established the confusion going on within the narrator's head, so the last two lines are almost more than is needed, especially with the concept of a Trojan Horse brought up in the third to last line.

great read!
AMorgan Comment by: AMorgan - 2007-11-07 00:44
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Also, put up a picture! Bitch.
AMorgan Comment by: AMorgan - 2007-11-07 00:44
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I really really really like the metaphor presented in this poem. It's blunt nature is absolutely delightful! I don't know why you say you don't want to put your poetry out there--- your words are more compelling than you believe :)
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