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JoanneMitch37
Joanne Mitchinson
United Kingdom, Merseyside, Liverpool

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Splurge.....

Splurge:

I'm not here to fight you,
Nor give you advice,
I say this once only,
I'll not say it twice.

I came here to love you,
Let love set you free,
To help you to grow,
Into what you’re meant to be.

Always and forever,
I am falling in love,
With a shining example,
Like the white turtle dove.

As you rise,
Care not if I stumble and fall,
Coz this is my battle,
And my crumbling wall.

To give love freely,
Not asking in return,
Knowing that others,
From me, will learn.

So dance with the devil,
For sure he dances well,
Were you ever certain,
That you had a soul to sell?

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hx Comment by: hx - 2007-11-19 08:33
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I love the sentiment and the lyrical quality of this piece. The first stanza sets a bit of a whimsical tone. It varies a bit from there (that's life, isn't it?) up to and including the final stanza, which is philosophical indeed.

My only critique is that the rhyming feels just a tad bit forced in spots. It'd be lovely to see you try this one in free verse.
jyngrehl Comment by: jyngrehl - 2007-11-08 09:33
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This was absolutely devine. Great flow, great images, and certainly a great story to tell. It makes me genuinely interested in what you have to say about life.
EnigmaticSoul Comment by: EnigmaticSoul - 2007-11-08 09:33
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This has such a wonderful flow to it! I really enjoyed reading this. Very good piece!
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