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Gregar Task (The Unholy Space Intro)
Gregar Task.
(The Unholy Space)
The time was new. It, was not only a new time. But, a time of new need. Gregar stared at the book that lay before. It read.
“Unholy Space.”
He re-read the title trying to categorize the book. He wasn’t an advent reader. No, but he read enough to the know that this book was different. No picture was on the front. The binding held no name. He shifted position thinking of what to do.
“The Unholy Space.” He mocked. Moving his sleeves back, he took the book and turned it over. He gasped.
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Comment by: RSK - 2007-11-08 12:31
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Well it's a intro for a book I had an idea for. So thanks for the imput. I'm really bad with commma's. I suppose I'll just stop using them.
But then again, I'll look like an idiot...
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Hmmm...almost a prose poem - on writer's block? (Unholy space - blank pages? Every writer's nightmare.)
You may receive a notice from the comma police - I've noticed in this and your Wee Poisoned Chalice piece that you throw an over-abundance of the little curliques into your writing. Tends to slow up the flow.
IE: '..it, was not..' should just be '..it was not..'
Other than some basic editing, this is a good hook - gets the reader wondering what comes next. Gasp, indeed. |
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