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W.U.C.
-So tired of the way things are
This fucked up world that we live in
where hustlers and pimps are glorified
-It’s sad
Money seems to be all that matters anymore
-To most
Life portrays this sexy persona
but I’m the aftermath
Desensitized from
too many women
too much sex
too much alcohol
too many drugs
too much Life
Bored with everything
around me and not knowing
where to go…
Wanting to disrupt
this repetitive cycle of
never-ending disappointment
And pull that trigger
“shoot” too much
pop a bottle of downers
and just say “Fuck Off”
-Too smart for that-
I know that killing
isn’t the answer
Taking lives
won’t better
my existence
or even help
me right now
Constant disappointment
in the people I meet
-not giving a fuck
about anything
but themselves
This way of life
in America needs
to change
or Death
will happen
1. End of Days
2. Revelations
3. Seven seals
4. Burnt corpses
5. Eternal suffering
6. Damnation
7. Christ’s Return
“Consider this your wake up call”
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Comment by: sarra - 2007-11-23 05:07
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Very strong points you make. I wasn't expecting the ending there, but it's definitely tru in every possible way.
We all need to wake up.
I fully agreed with the desensitization part as well. It's very true. We see so much death, natural disasters and so forth that they don't tug at our hearts any longer. War is televised; we're immune to that, etc.
If you recall from just history itself, Newspapers would put out major headlines that "The Mason family home was broken into and thieves took their Milano vase."
People would awe and talk about that for weeks! Nowadays, who cares? It wouldn't even <i>touch</i> a newspaper.
Headline today; "32 people killed in fire."
people think, "Wow that sucks..." and probably go about their lives. Could you imagine that headline in Mr. Mason's time?! It'd be ghastly!
Desensitization is a most foul of adversaries.
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Comment by: WLC Online- 2007-11-08 14:32
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| Wow, a real IN YOUR FACE slap in the face! Something to read on those dark days, eh? Sad but true commentary. But, maybe in the end there is redemption waiting too. |
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| I like the honest, straightforward tone of the piece but I think you should perhaps consider letting the reader make up its mind about the subject, otherwise the poem ends up being yet another opinion piece without anything for the reader to think about or imagine. Just a thought. |
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