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Comment by: Juliet - 2006-02-18 16:04
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| I think we can all relate to the pain of having to walk the unchosen path..great stuff! |
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| I think so many can relate; good job. |
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Comment by: alien - 2006-02-15 07:52
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| This is good. Its focus is on "you" but also man in general. I'd like to see you take this poem and fiocus upon one element of it, using that to expand that idea and make it into a unique piece of work written from your own perspective. This is a neat poem but it doesn't bring anything new to the table - we all feel this in some measure. The poet's job is to focus the readers' attention to a unique point of view and make them see something they haven't een before. You can do this, but you have to find a new angle from which to look at it :) |
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| I would love this if I was not walking the same path. |
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"The Ashanti Raider"
The Raider is a valuable mask from the Great Lakes region of Central Africa made available to trade for guns. Then it's stolen. Its owner enlists a random collection of movie extras to get it back. Action is graphic. Imagery lurid. Not recommended for gentle readers.
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