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zepol
Hector Lopez
United States, Texas, In San Antonio former New Yorker

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Curled and Dusted Revised 11/9/2007

There is a snake plant
Curled and dusted

Soil hard as rock
Brown and rusted

In a synthetic pot
Upon a laminated floor

It smells of ammonia
Nothing more

By the numbers
Performance care

All the plants
Of equal fare

And the snake plant
I hear it loud

Crying out
From amongst the crowd

All are lacking
Vegetating and hacking

Seeds planted
In sterile soil

Dysfunctional seeds
Run in coils

And these plants have grown
Crooked

Brown and rusted curled and dusted

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mercymanic Comment by: mercymanic Online- 2007-11-10 05:30
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Nice edit. It has even more power now, and is less ambiguous at least to a gnostic reader.
mercymanic Comment by: mercymanic Online- 2007-11-09 13:23
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This is a wonderful piece. Your word choices are surgically precise.

I do hope it is a global, rather than a personal, reflection.
fureyaersoy Comment by: fureyaersoy - 2007-11-09 10:37
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Zepol yet another dark but beautiful poem. Thanks for the read. I feel you have been in some dark phases somehow. Take care.
Fureya
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