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A single word from her icy lips
A single kiss is killing
A silent emptiness seen within her eyes
A silent teardrop falling - the pain so unwilling
She fell and she fell alone
Her screams so heartbreaking
Abandonment, her forgotten soul
She lies awake just wishing
Her faith shattered but not yet dead
A hope only she can ask for
Deaf to her weeping prayers
She cries - praying she would fade away
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This actually made me think of the pain and abandonment someone I know is feeling. I will ask them to visit editred.com and read this poem. It is always somewhat of a relief, when we are suffering, to read a poem or hear a song that reflects our emotions like a mirror. Great work, and thank you for sharing.
This poem you just wrote seems to have the narrator in a nostalgic state of plea and suffering without a pretense of approving which is quite emotional. This is a good way of writing such a sad and painful existence at the moment but despite it all, the narrator's faith is still there so it shows to me that only you can take your faith away.
