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Capturing My Dreams
Written for Alien's Acrostic challenge:
http://www.editred.com/index.php/My_Ink/Bulletin/Show/7740
cascade of night
approaches my slumber,
pillow creases whispering
tales of twilight,
unconscious thoughts upon the
remaining day;
in rest, I search for visions,
nocturnal ambition
goading my senses at play.
murmurs come to me,
yesterday disappears.
dipping and curling,
rumbling through colour and shape,
evolving into a half-imagined reality,
a form independent of nightmare or fantasy;
magic appears to us in our sleep,
showing us the road to travel on.
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Comment by: mitra - 2008-05-28 07:58
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| You are an amazing talent. Seeing what you needed to achieve and making the piece work as a whole... hmm.. you've made the write seems so effortless and unplanned. Brilliant! |
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I love this, especially the lines:
"dipping and curling,
rumbling through colour and shape,
evolving into a half-imagined reality,"
The entire poem is beautiful and it really draws you into its emotion.
Great tone and diction. |
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Comment by: ac7904 - 2007-12-04 18:56
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| Evocative word choice. Like the pillow creases "whispering". And there's certainly truth to the notion that dreams move beyond "nightmare and fantasy". |
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| Words nicely put together you didn't lose it for a second every line is beautiful I should start taking lessons from you dude.. I'm not kidding |
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This rolls of the tongue well, like the descriptiveness in the words... Just that dreams tend to wake me up in the middle of mid morning to write something down...
Glen Yumang Manese |
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