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marelaiana
nourhan hany
United Arab Emirates, abu dhabi

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orgasm

she didn't have an orgasm
what is the problem exactly is it cuz u didn't come he said,no the problem is u r acting like an ass hole.
love what can u say this tinglling feeling in ur stomach or is it the long lasting devotion ,
we meet ,we love ,we have sex ,then bye men lose interest when they as they get it on why ?? are women became the non resyclled object like ,a tissue ,or a can or may be just a ciggarete 1st u r all about the love the kissing & all that shit then u throw it away after u finish it it realy sucks.
excuse me for all the males but i have to say this ,why when men have sex u can't stop until he comes ,but on the other way if he finished before u do then u r all on ur own is it some kind of a plan or is it the treditional thing for men but hay i don't mean all men ,
some men just leave u there hanging starring at the cieling & u r a lucky girl if u didn't get the boots right away & stayed the night
if u have one of the good men u r blessed but if u ended up with a bastard just let go ....don't be sad about it he will never change u go ahead on ur way & forget his name & that u even met him just smile & say thts life .

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troyarn Comment by: troyarn - 2008-05-18 15:30
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Again, I have to agree with Wildefriend. Computer talk is only good on the computer chat room. It is agrivating to readers and loses your message.
I think you have plenty to say, but need to say it in the usual manner.
Wildefriend Comment by: Wildefriend - 2008-05-12 08:15
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I think this is a very interesting piece of writing, but regrettably, I think you can only do it once. Your construction is interesting because it looks like you have discovered a new form of writing English. However, unless you learn how to deal with the language in a standard way, you will just drive all your readers crazy. I could accept this shorthand style of writing if you correctly spelled all the words, and learn how to correctly punctuate a sentence.

Unfortunately, this is a reality you may find tough to fight. Best of luck in your writing.
:-)
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