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White.
White.
Blank.
Unexplainable.
Explainable.
A drop and then nothing.
Empty.
She says, I just need you.
Understandable.
Not to be explained.
But, there are deep emotions, baby, he says.
Unexplainable.
Explainable.
Indirect.
Hidden.
Secrets.
Speechless.
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| I wish there was more to this poem...but I think part of its appeal is that there isn't. Interesting read! |
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Comment by: lucy - 2007-11-10 15:54
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Where have you been!
Thanks for reading....
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Comment by: Starla - 2007-11-10 14:24
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Hi :) Thank you so much for your comment on "uncertainty" I really appreciate and i'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Comment by: lucy - 2007-11-10 12:58
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What a satisfying comment.
I can understand, I am frustrated too.
If I explained where my head is with the words stated, no, nevermind, I am frustrated with them too- I climb into it and it devours me. Around and around again.
I agree. :) Thanks for coming over. |
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| I am frustrated by this poem, in a good way. And not to sound like a new critic, but its “organic unity” is very effective for me. I think the words drawn out slowly are frustrating, like "A drop, and then nothing." The simultaneous parallels are made much stronger for me in this form--choppy, short and bold. Its great, I read it slowly and several times in a row to get really frustrated. |
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