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Somnius
Jake Cooper
United States, Indiana, Lamar

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Nostalgia

Staring up at the sky,
He thinks of Nothing.
And Nothing thinks of him,
Just as he thinks of it.

And the sky stares back while being stared at,
By nothing.
The nothing that writhes,
That cries , that sings,
That seethes under the sun with wide eyes.

He calls it something like Nostalgia,
A Rembrandt that’s in a dream,
That runs when he walks, leaves when he wakes,
Which he talks about to himself,
And he hates.

It takes the hours and demands the sky,
So now he lays in a stranger’s yard,
So now he lays in the sky, staring down,
Wide-eyed.

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Somnius Comment by: Somnius - 2007-11-10 16:38
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This poem is confusing, yeah I admit that. The repitition I used wasn't so much on purpose.
The reason it's so confusing is probably because to actually understand it, you'd have to know me as a person. I'm pretty indirect about everything. And in my poems, I often use words to represent something other than the actual word meaning to give the thing that's being represented further understanding..That is, if it's figured out. Anyways, just read it a few times. If you can't understand it, then I'm sorry.
MMerlino Comment by: MMerlino - 2007-11-10 09:40
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what are you even trying to say?
xemoxangelx Comment by: xemoxangelx - 2007-11-10 08:43
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i did find this poem a bit confusing,but i suppose many great poems are confusing,i like that you've used repetition but i think you may have gone a bit over the top with it but otherwise i think its quite a good poem
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