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sophen01
Sophie Heng
United States, PA, Philadelphia

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Requiem of Love

Heartbreak catches it by its neck
Slowly taking its breath away
With each push of Heartbreak’s palms
The blood vessels seems to snap away

Heartbreak unlocked its filthy hands
Dropped Love to its knees
With an evil smirk

Love on bended knees
Struggled for the air it breaths

Satisfied with the outcome
Of Love’s lost

A shrilling laughter explodes
From Heartbreaks throat

With one hard kick to the gut
Heartbreak made love buckled
Twisted over and then fold

Now laying there with eyes wide open
Love pleaded to the mercy of Heartbreak

Heartbreak has no heart
The pleasure of killing love
Was love enough

Tears of pain flows freely from love
As it accepts its fate
It prayed for a painless death
And laid there defeated

Heartbreak has no pity
With one dark blow to the head
Love was left there
Dead
Completely

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Glen aka FAD Comment by: Glen aka FAD - 2007-12-15 16:23
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Using the word as the antagonist... I believe the word "completely", is not needed in the last line, but they are your expression...


Glen Yumang Manese
Comment by: - 2007-12-07 14:07
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very interesting perspective
it follows the order of things exactly in this writing
metaphysicalg Comment by: metaphysicalg - 2007-11-11 16:26
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Definately an interesting way to look at it. I liked the way you turned such a painful emotional experience into a personified, slow motion battle.
anitak Comment by: anitak - 2007-11-11 00:38
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Extremely well writtem very different from so much stuff I have read, its trul unique and trult beautiful. NICE
sadon Comment by: sadon - 2007-11-10 23:04
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Oh my god,I never read something like this ever and they way u've put ur words together,Gorgeous! I love the battle between the two,it's something so common ...the tragic ending.This poem reaches out to my heart!
So many of us are victims of evil heartbreak! sigh* i better stop,i could go on. wonderful**
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