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drchase
dante cox
United States, new york, newburgh

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FuTuRe

u shud reconsider u future...its vital for success

hard work pays off and u learn from the best

use ur stress for ur motivation for the most part and never for the less

nevertheless live after death as better than the rest

im just a piece of the world...the rest has been completin me

i feel sorry for opposition...besides y try to compete wit me

the only one of my kind...that's just a piece of my uniquity

thas not even a word...thas me makin u believe in me

yeah yeah...power...aint suttin u cud get from liftin weights

and if yur great, u'll find on ur own, strength helps u to hit ur fate

harder cuz it strike u...but that's just a reality check

when u broke and no one likes u that aint reality yet

get a life...make one for urself and ur future fam

build all of it from scratch like u are ur future man

u want it to be perfect...u want it to make u glad

when ur in need of motivation...not having it makes u mad

so what...u knuckle up for this one ride u buckle up

cuz this is a rollercoaster but in ur car u cud muscle up

cuz u think thas suttin u can handle but its not in ur hands

no matter how bold u are its in another mans hands

in this world that ur a part of...its because of sin that it stands

ur futures based on others' pasts...change it? only in the present u can

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Abi Corzo Comment by: Abi Corzo - 2007-11-22 18:42
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I love this...the rhythm rocks...is this beat poetry?

What you are saying is so true;
"u shud reconsider u future...its vital for success
hard work pays off and u learn from the best..."
I think every teenager should read this!

You're a joy to read,
ThanQ, Abi
Jesica Comment by: Jesica - 2007-11-12 14:28
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"nevertheless live after death as better than the rest
im just a piece of the world...the rest has been completin me
i feel sorry for opposition...besides y try to compete wit me
the only one of my kind...that's just a piece of my uniquity
thas not even a word...thas me makin u believe in me"
~my favorite lines, they're the strongest part of the piece.

You might love universalemcees.com. . .they have very talented textcees but people there are very picky, but its mostly constructive criticism. I liked reading this!
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