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speak less
you say you can’t understand
how I sit still as the day is long
staring at the stage, paper crisp
pens dancing along the lines
scratching a message, maybe a song
i say, maybe your mouth is tired
maybe this connection is wired,
for a failure
i will send a sailor for your guide
to help you tailor the seams of
this paper fence
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Comment by: Dante - 2007-12-30 10:43
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I can really relate to this poem. Some people just don't shut the fuck up. But anyway, my favorite line was "maybe this connection is wired, for failure". That is a simple, yet great, way to state that point.
I do think that, in the second line, "how I sit as still as the day is long", would make your point a little clearer.
I really enjoyed reading this poem. Thanks for sharing. |
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