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Frontalot
Sean Hanson
United States, WA, Fort Lewis

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Proboscis

We argued whether the dull haze over Portland was fog or smog,
two big-city veterans too far removed to tell anymore,
but there on the duck pond and nearing midnight--
its canted granite hard and cold against my back,
your face and hair so soft and warm against my chest--
it ceased to matter, who was arguing for what
and the significance of either.

The ducks were gone,
the night was rich as the mosquito's fill,
just as bloody,
and we were just as swollen as her gut
before I finally swatted her away,
and when I leaned in for the kiss
I took whole swallows as greedy as hers.

We loped back,
we ambled, we took our time, it's true,
and I saw the Columbia shimmering,
glimmering black and deep beneath the fog.

You were right all along.

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AMorgan Comment by: AMorgan - 2007-11-16 03:17
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I like this, but less than your others. I'm not quite sure why. Something about the beginning trips me up. I think it's just because I personally know you so well, sometimes it can be hard to decipher works of art/I'm de-sensitized (is that even a word?). This is lovely, nonetheless. I'm glad to see you writing more :)
niceandy Comment by: niceandy - 2007-11-13 09:26
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Tender and moving. It's those tiny moments of love that are both loss and victory, which this poem maps out so well.
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