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schizoptimistics
Ross Lang
United States, Ohio, Columbus

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Great pickup lines.

I am agony. I am the thought that spurs from antagonizing, I am an apparition that is subsequently rising from the steam you generate when you breath.

Create something, say something different than the normal fasade between your split lips, just listen, I am the vision you see when you dream oh so lonely.

I am emptiness in the purest of forms, extracted from the bones of the souls less fortunate, I found an opportune time to strike and embed myself in your heart, your eyes, your tongue, I am that smell in your dwelling.

Again.. Against..

I am the form of true anguish, Pulling on the leaving coat tails of love, I am the over, the under, the in between, I am always there when you fall, I am the monster in your dreams, I am the one that holds you when you have nothing but a pillows seams, I am Love, I am hate, and everything in between.

I am eternal, as long as we breath, I am emotion, I am devotion, I am revolution in the eyes of men. Have it once or twice or thousands of times, have me when you break down and do it again.

I am everything, and in the eyes of the beholder and his brother over his shoulder, I am what makes your heart beat, but you say I’m nothing.

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OilsandSyntax Comment by: OilsandSyntax - 2007-11-14 21:20
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I like this...do you perform your poetry? I can easily see you on stage reading this at an opin mic or something.
kaguirre Comment by: kaguirre - 2007-11-13 21:00
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the flow from one thought to another is seamless and it amuses me that you called it "great pickup lines". not quite sure that reciting this would have the same immediate effect a great pickup line would be expected to have. hehe
happygaara Comment by: happygaara - 2007-11-13 20:51
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:) i'm sure i don't understand this even the little bit that i think i do, but it's really pretty. man, pretty is a weak word, i know.

i'm bad at comments. sorry.

it's not pretty, this is HOT!!!
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