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KnightPale
Arkady Gurovich
United States, California, West Hollywood

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DECEPTIONS

Do you remember that our trip
By railway coach,
In the compartment
Which was empty and discreet,
And how incessantly
I kissed your palms
To broach
Their scented,
Womanly,
Affectionate deceit?

Behind the window,
Burial mounds swam to pass us;
The past again,
Forgotten,
They were evanesced;
Unclasping
I removed your bra,
Like the eye-glasses
From trembling
Rosy
Staring pupils of your breast.

There,
In geometry
Of empty shelves of coach,
Gazing,
We read the whole novel,
All of it
Which was abrupt and transient, dear,
But don't reproach
The manly,
Hot,
Disturbed,
And passionate deceit.

Reality
Appeared
Without invitation,
A thief
Who left after himself
So vivid trails:
Next door compartments'
Idiotic conversations
And
Crazy hammering
Of wheels on endless rails.

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KnightPale Comment by: KnightPale - 2006-02-18 16:47
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Thank you, dear Marylou!
Your praise sounds a bit axiomatic: the poet has no more tools to create images, except words. So I did my best.
Comment by: - 2006-02-18 13:05
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I like the rhythmic ending of each of the stanzas and the images created from the words really stand out.
KnightPale Comment by: KnightPale - 2006-02-14 19:29
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Ah, Lerochka, what a merit received from you.
Thank you.
Valerie Comment by: Valerie - 2006-02-14 17:12
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Your rhyme scheme is not always evident, unless one goes looking for it. The mood of the poem is relaxed, invitational and gives pleasure. The repetition of enjambment has an exhilarating feel; it's breathless. The lines are varied, and gives a sense of melody and surprise. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem and will read it over and over breathlessly.
KnightPale Comment by: KnightPale - 2006-02-13 10:00
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Dear noneedtofocus,
Thank you for your kind words of review.
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