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venturpreneur
Paul Griffin
United States

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The Passing

This poet’s book is nigh complete
Apparitions, thoughts replete
Surely chains are burst asunder
Heaven’s flight; past gone under

Take your wing, Immerse the joy
Laughter-dappled prose employ
Sing the wondrous rising crest
Pallet’s colors bright and blest

Scales have fallen, sweet vision found
Chiming hallowed strings resound
Forthwith hath been lifted up
Liquid gold doth fill this cup

Glad and grateful evermore
Glory’s path to heaven’s door
Once was bound by earthly bond
Fly now, freely, homeward; - Gone.

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Danahfaren Comment by: Danahfaren - 2008-05-05 08:07
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Beautiful poem! Well done! I imagine you must feel proud of it. Beautiful choice of imagery, it takes the reader on a journey to hold dear for a while. :-)
QueenMoniqwa Comment by: QueenMoniqwa - 2007-12-21 12:16
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Wonderful use of couplets; I've never mastered the AABB scheme and don't sell it well.

There is a quality of Victorianism about this work; formal and well crafted.

Thank you for the excellent work
venturpreneur Comment by: venturpreneur - 2007-11-18 09:43
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Thank you. I guess I'm proud of this one.
lorimazzola Comment by: lorimazzola - 2007-11-18 09:33
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I absolutely loved your use of imagery! Very fluid and enjoyable!
venturpreneur Comment by: venturpreneur - 2007-11-14 19:11
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Thank you. As most of my work, it came in a rush. When I write, I seldom have to cross off or change words. But I enjoyed this one. Was written with joy. Some of mine were written in times of anguish (obviously).
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