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The Muse
My guitar has seen the world conmigo
through the stipplings
of life's percussions.
She's beckoning me to return
to the rhythmic pounding
of Dominican merengue.
She drapes the woven fibers of her arm
casually over my shoulder.
The familiar weight of her piggy-back ride
comforts me through the hissing, buzzing,
winding marketplace.
We barter our dinner con dos cervesas
and stroll to the beach as one.
On the pasty shores of La Playa,
I undo her strap and admire her ample curves.
Inlaid with mother-of-pearl,
she is perfection.
And untiring muse.
We watch the nameless beauties strolling by.
They're hand in hand with lovers they don't know.
They toss us their dutiful centavos,
good samaritan pesos,
and once in awhile the effort of an insincere smile.
They don't appreciate you the way I do.
Me amor
You depend on me (the way a man needs to be depended on)
for the melody of your soul.
Submissive to the exploration of my hands,
humming as I strum.
You whisper decades of nostalgic repertoire.
You continually soothe me with the harmony of your slow arpeggios
and the peppery texture of your quickening syncopation.
You sing each note with the richness and purity
of flawless creation.
Your voice awakens my inner dance.
Your movement in my hands is freckled
with unbridled passion.
Together
we feel the flute-like breezes
of hand-carved woodwinds.
They're tribal in their cry
to join the beating ocean waves
in the song of our transgressions.
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My sincere thanks for the poetic compliment...I don't know much, I'm afraid, and quite frankly am not sure how to "categorize" most of my pieces.
Someone told me that poetry has a specific rhyme/rhythm pattern/structure...and everything else is prose...so that's sort of what I went by...
If this is not true, could you explain the difference for me? |
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Comment by: hx - 2007-11-26 11:32
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My guitar is a 'she' too :)
Lovely piece. The use of Spanish makes a nice punctuation. The only question I have regards categorization: I've noticed you categorize some very poetic pieces as prose. Not that there's anything wrong with prose, of course...it's just that everyone else I know would call that poetry. I'm wondering what you know that we don't.... |
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Comment by: peter44 - 2007-11-14 20:17
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Hi Nikki,
Love your poetry. You seem to be seeking love and never found it. "Lovers they don't" "Making love to a guitar" Something in the "Communion" and "Howl" The images you create are very beautiful. Not sure if this was your attention but it left me wanting more as if they were unfinished but that may have just been my expectations. Peter44 |
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| Those are great suggestions...and ones you can be sure I'll take heed to. Thanks for reading. |
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Comment by: Stephie - 2007-11-14 12:26
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| This is a poem I will come back to time and time again :) My only suggestion would be to see how much more forceful it will be if you put it in present tense and use a more active voice in some places rather than the passive voice. For example, instead of, 'she is beckinong me', how about 'she beckons me'. To me, that sounds mcu nore powerful and forceful (in a good way of course ;) ) I love the poem darling! You have great imagery. My other suggestion is to plat around with the form and line breaks.....just to play ;) |
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