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Louise
Louise Davidson
United Kingdom, Belfast

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Worship

Gold is spilling over the windowsill,
I open my eyes and I’m awake.
I’m alive.
Clothed in skin and cotton
I reach across the no-man’s-land
Of the duvet, searching for you;
My place of worship,
My second skin.
Cathedral amongst men in the bed
Beside me, always;
Covers kicked back, one arm outstretched.
Ink and warmth and pelt,
Muffled mumblings at the break of day,
This is my religion
And in bed in the morning,
I stare into the windows of the cathedral
And I pray.

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Up the Staircase Comment by: Up the Staircase - 2008-03-30 12:50
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This poem is very simple, yet emotive and tender.

Excellent work.
Dakota Comment by: Dakota - 2007-12-03 15:59
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I love the metaphor too.
I like the tactile quality
'Clothed in skin and cotton'
And the use of light
'Gold is spilling over the windowsill'
And intriguing
'Ink and warmth and pelt'
and profound
'This is my religion'.
I wish it were everyones.
davidblaine Comment by: davidblaine - 2007-11-15 10:44
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Wow, imagine, someone who seems to actually be happy with their mate!

Duvet! I'd never heard of that word until an Irish lass wrote it for me. So I just checked your location and,

Bingo!

Hi from across the pond. Liked the poem a lot

Dave
aprilmayed Comment by: aprilmayed - 2007-11-14 14:53
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Yowza! I adore your wording. This poem has much of the same ideas that many other poems have had, but you make the idea something fresh and new. I really enjoyed this and I would love to read more!
OilsandSyntax Comment by: OilsandSyntax - 2007-11-14 14:02
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Fantastic and powerful...I love the metaphor.
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