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OilsandSyntax
Nikki Niswonger
United States, Ohio

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Once Upon An Insomniac

I'm tired.

I vision chubby koalas
watching me from my canopy post.

I can't sleep.

I'm restless.

I dream of them tickling me
with tiny eucalyptus leaves
each time my eyelids are tempted with
heaviness.

I'm afraid.

And all the swirly neon cinnamon
rolls on my ceiling are spinning and
spinning as the fan
chops them into bite-size cereal and sends
them flying off into the milky walls
of my room.

I need to sleep.

my thoughts are laughing at me,
forming little comic book bubble
captions floating and bouncing
through this stale air I breathe.

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OilsandSyntax Comment by: OilsandSyntax - 2007-11-27 22:18
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I agree with you on this...though I didn't think about it till now....revision is in the works.
tristanmmang Comment by: tristanmmang Online- 2007-11-27 21:02
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Okay, so its very funny, I think, and definitely lucid, but it doesn't seem "scary" to me—not that it needs to be of course, but for some reason I want the gut-wrenching insomniac and not the hallucinating one (personal opinion). I feel more dizzy than sleep deprived after reading this. Maybe a more specific drive or finish would clarify whether I should puke or pass out? I think I just want more here; the disassociation works well, I just feel like it should ramble or rant more... anyways, very nice as is, thanks for the read.
hx Comment by: hx - 2007-11-26 11:35
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All us insomniacs can relate. Very descriptive. You've captured it!
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