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Jam1son33
James D'Ambrosio
United States, New York, Amityville

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Desired Realms

To help a boy sleep at night, light
Fairy tales to keep the terror away,
Dreamt up spells and concocted remedies of
Staircases spiraling around bright full moons;
The world looks sound from this stunning view.
A waxed slide tunnels through billions of stars,
With recorded scenes projected on the galaxy;
Intelligence gathered by the Universe.

The house is breathing now,
Doors and shutters spar an alarming wind,
Suck out unnoticed into a molded land.
Swimming with clay-figured fish in the animated sky,
Remote controlled leaves mingle with dangling snowflakes.
Others build sets to perform their utopian creations;
Clouds that rewind and rivers that pause,
Monumental playgrounds planted by a giant hand.

Ball pits sit at the bottom for when you fall,
Each ball a glowing orb of light with ensnared
Fairies that cast heavenly dust into the artist’s eyes;
Cuckoo clocks chirp from trees of colored paper,
Replacing those torn from the earth by a heartless race;
A boy finds his favorite truck aggrandized, and
An hourglass sandbox to play in sideways,
Pathways burrowed, colonizing like ants.

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stormlee Comment by: stormlee - 2007-11-18 10:33
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cuckoo clocks chirp... I liked the stream of consiousness flow you have here...and the inner melody..Theorionfive is on too something... this would be a great song..
theorionfive Comment by: theorionfive - 2007-11-17 02:15
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I think it's a very different kind of poetic sense, where it's more just being purely descriptive. There's not much flow to it in general, but it's relatively easy to swallow, if you ask me. Anyways, I often think of words like this to be like John Lennon and Paul McCartney's "Lucy In The Sky With Diamonds"...at least that's what I paralleled it to. Awesome job. :)
nadinesellers Comment by: nadinesellers - 2007-11-15 20:12
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this poem is bound to find thirsty minds, colonizing like ants, summed up so well.
i had a hard time saying-- waxed slide -- clay-figured fish-- truck aggrandized.
it broke the spell.
any words which stick out of the natural rhythm act as hobbles in the quest for flow.
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