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confuddled
I am here but
then again I'm not.
Noiseless humming in my mind
dictates to me I'm not all here
It's only due to
lack of awareness;
nothing more,
nothing
less...
Why must I put myself through
this night after day,
day after night?
I fight yet it
eludes me, why
oh why can I
not
attain...
I don't ask for much
yet this somber thought
keeps running amok through my mind.
It keeps me in check
but lowers my resolve
to try because I know
I will fail
yet
again...
My eyes are heavy with
unquenched need,
I can't go on yet
I can't give in.
Why, oh why
must I suffer,
why, why can't I
feel the embrace
of beautiful
blessed
sleep..?
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| ahhh... the sleep deprived, forced creativity of insomnia. I like the tempo of this poem and the content definitely strikes a chord with me. |
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Your point is well-expressed and the form carries it beautifully.
Sleep is the lover who teases us sometimes and then doesn't call us for ages! |
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| I like the pace and presentation it reflects the central theme, and as an insomniac myself i relate thanks |
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| This is great, i really love it. |
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| My husband pointed out that working on the computer stimulates the brain to the point of causing insomnia. It is a catch 22-can't sleep, get on the computer, computer causes us to have a hard time sleeping. Makes you wonder just how much intelligence the programmers put into these machines that make us so addicted that we can't live without them. |
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