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An angel fallen
An angel fell from heaven into my life
She was scarred, her wings tattered, and her heart tired
She was beautiful and had an amazing natural grace
Afraid she wouldn't fly again she thought of giving up
Upon a closer look I could see her heart full of life
She deserved to fly again, she needed to fly again
I helped her repair her wings
It was pure pleasure to straighten her halo
She smiled and spread her magnificent wings
With an effortless reach for the sky my angel took flight
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Comment by: Dakota - 2008-02-04 10:30
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It's a nice sentiment - a sweet moment in time
A nice set of thoughts displayed from your mind.
Like any of us who write - we are all trying to hone our way with words - how to make these thoughts that come into beautiful mobiles that we hang before the reader - hoping to inspire, or entertain, or enlighten.
Sure this piece is a little clunky in parts, maybe, but I liked it. |
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| I like this poem baby, it reminds me of two people I know. I do agree with the comment above though, but dont worry it still sounded great! |
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| I like the idea of this poem, but the rhythm takes away from it. For instance, could the first line read "An angel fell from heaven..." instead of "An angel had fallen from heaven"? |
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