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criosa54
Criosa Duggan
United States, Michigan, Canton

Words: 64
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numb

Ice cold, silent, alone...
my blood is ice, frozen within my veins
hands numb, so is body and soul
hands are shaking
alone at last
I grab the hammer, smash the mirror
adrenaline surging
hands are shaking
grab a large shard
have a seat, bathroom floor
cold, silent, alone...
draw the shard quickly across each wrist
skin splitting, blood seeping
left to die alone

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Dakota Comment by: Dakota - 2008-02-04 10:20
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In your face - takes no prisoners - brutal and totally true to the scene.
It's hard to say I enjoyed it - that might be perverse - but I did enjoy your perspective and what you achieved.
deathdealer Comment by: deathdealer - 2007-11-20 10:25
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This is why I love you so much, I will never leave your side!
sadon Comment by: sadon - 2007-11-20 07:25
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ouch!
This poem hurt alot,but I think i've felt like this alot,and i've actualy seen all of this happening.
I think if you add a few more words or replaced a few, you know really felt it,it would be real great. I guess it's just way too direct,or maybe that is the beauty of this one! :)
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