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Matthew Eduard Abuelo
Matthew Abuelo
United States, New York, New York City

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Whale Hunt 2

Authors note: this is still a work in progress

The voice of the sea is growing silent,
The voice of the sea is quickly becoming canceled in still culture.
The frozen fingers of the sea are tightening around the vocal-cords of its singers.
The land of the rising sun casts a mute shadow over the artic symphony.
Harpoons become flaming arrows that pierce the heart of the ancient song of Ishmael.
There are no more sharks in the water,
They are all on board with smiles for the canceled meat,
On Wall Street,
In Tokyo
With dollar bills shoved up their noses waiting for the next snow storm
Whose skin is the images of TV reality
Whose eyes are churches of the voided God of consumption
Whose teeth pierce the skin of those Northern Seas
And into the Baghdad sands,
Whose shit buries
Coney Island’s last stand
or the prostitutes of Time Square’s past.
Whose stomach ingests the genius of descent.

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What iron hand of industry washes over the northern waters
Where the Gemini dagger washes in with the Eastern flow to know the flesh of the fathers of the sea,
To guardians of the oceanscapes
then dissolves into the red tide.
But the time of the old Eastern fishermen are growing short as they look to vanish into the mercury backwash.

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TequilaTwilight Comment by: TequilaTwilight - 2007-12-05 07:50
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Your use of movement and stillness as clashing forces really works in this poem. (reminiscent of GInsberg's Senflower Sutra i think - mainly the tone and the message).

There are some really beautifullly crafted lines in this poem, my favourite being:

"Where the Gemini dagger washes in with the Eastern flow to know the flesh of the fathers of the sea"

this is the first of your pieces i have read so cannot comment in comparison like Paul has, The poem as it is works well, you could expand it also - but in all honesty to overflow the poem into more may take away its penetration.

i will certainly be reading more.
poetguyraza Comment by: poetguyraza - 2007-11-28 06:10
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Beautifuly written sir love it but dont you think the lines were a bit too long I mean not that its a bad or freaky thing but I guess that you should've added a little more class to that thing seriously its perfect but well its not what you call alot of fun to read...
Matthew Eduard Abuelo Comment by: Matthew Eduard Abuelo - 2007-11-26 07:52
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Thanks, I've been so busy with other matters that I have not had time to really focus on my writing.
Violet Blue Comment by: Violet Blue - 2007-11-25 18:35
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Hey Matthew.

To be brutally honest, I thought this was a lazy piece of writing for you. I know you have a way of throwing abstraction into the mix of your polemic, but I felt here that maybe this is a piece in the making not a finished product. You are a very interesting writer but here I found you floundering in pretension and perhaps unable to express your true intent. Leave "Moby Dick" to Melville, it's not your subject matter. Or maybe you can come back with another draft to show your real intent.

Respect, as always.

Paul :D
mercymanic Comment by: mercymanic - 2007-11-20 12:27
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Beautiful. As usual I love your choice of imagery. Showing how the hunters have begun to pay for the faults in their humanity was a particularly deft twist of scene.
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