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GeorgeFellini
George Fellini
United States, Idaho, Boise

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Holiday Romance Triolet

"We make love, yes? Have good time, no? You, Me?"

"No thank you, I'd rather not (you greasy wop), now go away."

On holiday, in sunny Spain, I met a man called Donatellie -

"We make love - yes? Have good time - no? You? Me?"

He was too short and smarmy, no good for me, I'm fussy see.

But he kept on and on and on, and then I heard him say:

"We make love - yes! Have good time - no! You! Me!"

"NO, THANK YOU, I'd rather NOT, you greasy wop, now... GO AWAY!"

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Rosie Sandler Comment by: Rosie Sandler - 2007-11-30 12:59
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Really funny! Great, modern take on what can be a rather stilted form (rather like this comment - sorry!). Anyway, I laughed out loud - thank you!
KelleyRose Comment by: KelleyRose - 2007-11-29 19:58
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HAHA! This was so funny! Great job!
Audiogeist Comment by: Audiogeist - 2007-11-26 04:19
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Lmao! Funny, yes! Unique take on Alien's challenge. Nice one!

:)
Nora Comment by: Nora Online- 2007-11-23 13:55
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Si, molto bene, Signore Fellini! L'uomo italiano e molto, come dite, "pushy."

You crack me up.
alien Comment by: alien - 2007-11-22 08:21
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HAHAHAHAHAHA. That had me in STITCHES!
'you greasy wop' - that's genius! I'm making my baby giggle, I'm laughing so much! :D

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