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wolfmorphine
Shannon Hilson
United States, CT, Manchester

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The Valium Bath

Fixed under water glass
Like a splinter beneath Poseidon's skin
There is no Sunday
And no one knows Rhyme
With her cool hands
And her goat's feet.

There are only
Walking dead
From whose wool-lined mouths
Pour blindfolds
And broken keys
Strangle holds
And bloody knees.

Rapunzel bruised
Left for dead forgotten
Bound and gagged
By her own golden hair.
Drowning in the Valium Bath
Warm and blind
Dying slow
But unaware.

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bounarjaf Comment by: bounarjaf - 2008-03-17 08:21
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powerful and sensually disturbing. I enjoyed this quite a lot. You have
a talent for creating a mood that is both dark and beautiful.
Dakota Comment by: Dakota - 2007-12-02 06:49
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I like your references - it immediately creates a vision. I really enjoy the unusual mix of words and the effortless flow:

Pour blindfolds
And broken keys
Strangle holds
And bloody knees.

You weave words into a spell.
You have found a unique place I think.
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