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Metalcove
Mireille LABORIE
France, Epinal

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Crucify

Hold me higher
Tie my wrists at the branches
Of this bare tree
And my toes at its bark
Offer my body
To the beauty of Nature
Always thirsty, always starving
Crucify me

Let my useless heart struggle
Itself in my now barren blood
I'll shed no salt
For I've no sorrow for leaving
And nothing can't be more
Hurtful than this life.

Higher, please, but
Not too much, I don't want to
See the blue sky
And birds in love - make me envious
Tighter the strings
Don't give me a chance
To fly away despite I've no wings.

Crucify me.
Plug me there and forget me
I've much reason
But to stay I have no more,
I've many senses
But not one for a way back to world
I'm not blind, nor naked
Underneath the screen of my long hair
Just, I have never been.

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Metalcove Comment by: Metalcove - 2007-11-24 08:08
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Thank you, it's good to have some sincere comments.
Comment by: - 2007-11-24 07:12
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This was an interesting concept. There appears to be a couple very minor typo's (I'm famous for this myself) [and nothing can't be more] It seems this might have been and nothing can be more. In the last stanza, I would have chosen "But to stay I have no more" rather than a contraction...just for an easier read. This was a great poem and the rest are just comments. Be well. =)
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