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RyTilcock
Ryan Tilcock
United Kingdom

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The Man with No Beard

The frozen air chills his face,
As he walks around this snowy place,
"Cold face! Cold face!" The baying wind jeered,
"You should wear a nice warm beard!"

And in the taverns about the town,
The landlady wears a sturdy frown,
"You will not be supping upon our beer,
"For you're too young to drink in here!"

"21 be I!" I protest,
And try to act a burly guest,
But the landlady,"Pah!" she merely sneered,
"Come back when you can grow a beard!"

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MaryannWebb Comment by: MaryannWebb - 2007-11-28 04:55
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hahahaha... loved this! The wording was well placed and rolled along to give the feel of a good yarn.

Wasn't sure if the change in p.o.v. from third person to first person in the last stanza was intentional?

Reminded me of the way Primus construct lyrics in their songs. :) Great read, thanks for sharing!
Comment by: - 2007-11-24 07:42
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I loved this one. Such light-hearted conveyance of an obvious frustration. This one was very fun.
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