Gifted with a special little Island...- Wee Challenge # 19
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Gifted with a special little Island...- Wee Challenge # 19
A volcanic eruption of love that warms your heart with the lava of happy memories, making small islands of hope each time we cry, shining like the tropical sun and reflecting colours of our personality like the blue sky on the sea...
Exotica like the exotique flowers, her love is countless like the golden sand, she is Island, the little girl born different from us, shapes you someone special each moment we spend with her...
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thanks very much for your comment...
maybe i will use another word instead of shapes... |
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Comment by: karjon - 2007-11-29 05:55
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A very sweet wee story, Joanna.
Couple of picky things:
'warm' should, I think, be 'warms'
'hopes' should, I think, be 'hope'
'shapes you someone special each moment we spent with her' - I'm not entirely sure what 'shapes you someone special' means, but I'm fairly sure 'spent' should be 'spend' for tense consistency.
Thanks for taking the challenge.
Cheers
Karen |
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| As with the last piece I read of yours, this is expressed beautifully. You must feel things deeply and truly to capture words the way you do. :) Thanks for sharing your work. |
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| Joanna, one can feel the love with which you write! |
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Comment by: sarra - 2007-11-24 11:24
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| this is just beautiful! I love your interpretation of this one. Nice work! |
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