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BoyUninterrupted
Tlotlang Molefe
South Africa, North West Province, Mafikeng

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Miles and Miles

The grating burps of the cab’s rushing tires against the intermittent beams prostrate across the shoddily built, hence always under construction Grand Central Parkway amplified the countdown already unwinding in my head. Each tick, each burp of the tire against a beam was as though an accusation that my fate was of my own doing and with each, the more vexed I grew at once again having to pack a bag and leave.

Once the cab crossed the Triborough still harried by the road’s imperfections, my restlessness about my fate seeped through and spoke. It was nothing audible, but it spoke enough to call the drivers attention as he asked in the familiar, “Are you okay buddy?” A nod is all I could manage and as he turned his attention back to the business of steering the cab, the ticking grew louder.

In a few ticks I’ll be on a plane and the pilot, for all his good intentions will build a wall made of miles between me and lazy Saturday mornings in a laughing bed, between me and my hand against smooth caramel skin, between me and moments spent in a sweaty lovetangle. In a few ticks we’ll be back to missed telephone calls and text messages. In a few ticks, again the anguish.

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Dakota Comment by: Dakota - 2007-12-03 18:41
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Sadly the whole reading milarky washes both ways... I have no recollection of becoming one of your readers? Have I been watching too much lost - or do you look like an Elephants bum? Of course - now I've regained some composure - I realise you are looking into a mirror and I feel rather foolish and familiar and probably should beg your forgiveness... Instead I shall wax lyrical about your prose...

First off; I'm a huge fan of the word vexed.
Plus this line - 'for all his good intentions will build a wall made of miles between me and lazy Saturday mornings in a laughing bed' - is jolly good!
I have to comment also - that I'm fond of caramel skin also...
All in all - a damned fine show.

BTW: I have no questions, and it looks like I need to say, good write, good write, good write - but I have no idea why...
OilsandSyntax Comment by: OilsandSyntax - 2007-11-25 20:30
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I love the imagery...I can hear it, see it, smell it, you did a great job taking us, as readers, on this jouney with you. Good write.
lucy Comment by: lucy - 2007-11-25 08:59
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is it an affair? a love affair..... I really liked this piece, really got into the details, the mood, good write, good write..
janedevine Comment by: janedevine - 2007-11-25 00:08
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A short piece yet it makes me ask many questions. Why the distance? Why was this person having to leave. Why the missed calls and anguish?
Good.
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