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I Wish I Knew
Thoughts are spinning
In my head
Sometimes I wish
I was dead
Life isn't
All that kind
Getting worse
Over time
Twists, turns
Then dead ends
All that's left
Is my friends
Parents think
I'm a disgrace
They wish I was in a
Different place
School is hard
Grades are dropping
I want it to end,
But it's not stopping
Girls at school
Are all witches
I want to slap
The stupid bitches
Guys all think,
Well I have no clue.
Sometimes I wish I
Knew what to do
So this is my
Final bow
I have to say
Good bye for now
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Comment by: phillmag Online- 2007-12-23 14:09
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i like the matter, but not the meter. I think,at times, it could be neater.
Twists, turns, then dead ends
all thats left is friends
The "my" before friends is unnecessary. In poetry meter matters. |
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| Thanks for the comments!!! I didn't really like this poem as much as my others though... |
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Very nice write. The emotions flow smoothly with a bold tone letting the reader feel the anger and frustration. "Life isn't
All that kind Getting worse Over time", I can relate to this..Life does tend to deal some dirty cards it seems. Kudos! |
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| Most of my emotion came because I was really mad at my parents. I've been mad at them all week... |
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| I really like this one too...There are a lot of emotions behind ur poems... |
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